Friday Fictioneers – a blog with a photo prompt – Every, you guessed it, Friday. Here’s my 100 word story.
Swept Away?
by Gretchen Fogelstrom
The shadows are growing long. I know it’s time to go home, to face her. Deep down, I know she is right. I need to go back to school.
But I’ve always felt alive on the beach, nowhere else. The rest of the world seems too chaotic. The rhythm of the rising and setting of the sun, the in and out of waves, they help me breathe. The biggest crazy, is when the wind kicks up and the waves grow large.
The wind is kicking up now. And the waves are at my toes. What if a rogue wave comes? Could I be swept away? Could I become one with the fish?
Aren’t I philosophic? Hmm, maybe philosophy as a major?
Nice story, Gretchen, hopefully your character can find their own path…or maybe find a college near the ocean.
College near the ocean sounds good!
A good place to gather your thoughts… I think you may have a typo here: ‘And they waves are at my toes.’
Thanks for the catch! I had well over 100 words and kept cutting – missed a y. Thanks for that!
I liked this. For me the photo had an end of summer feeling and your story captured this. I hope he thinks again about his choice of subject.
Me too. Long shadows, low light. Felt like end of summer. Didn’t the photo seem warm? I’d like some warm about now!
Me too. We’ve more snow forecast for tonight. Brrrr!
I really enjoyed this piece – I like the way it moves through stages from musings to the change in the waves, and in turn directing the narrator’s thoughts. 🙂
Thanks!
Hmm, maybe philosophy as a major? Sounds like fun to me 😉
A beach university with philosophy sounds great 🙂
Are you thinking Univ of Santa Cruz like I am?
well done. nothing like a philosophy major to stall for time.
Totally agree! Ha!
We have a daughter who felt a bit like that about college and is now in art school. I enjoyed this.
janet
Dear Gretchen,
I really enjoyed being part of her thoughts. Well done.
shalom,
Rochelle
Thanks – and thanks for the beautiful prompt!
Hi Gretchen,
I like the way she uses her love of the beach and sea to describe her life. Ron
I tend to use nature to describe myself as well, so perhaps that was just an obvious method for me. Hadn’t really thought about it before – thanks for the insight.
the ocean refreshes my spirit and makes me calm. I understand not wanting to leave it. you bring that feeling to me in this piece.
“The biggest crazy, is when the wind kicks up and the waves grow large.” — a favorite line.
Thanks!!
Philosophy it is then! It’s always so hard when you find it hard to do what you know you should. I felt the pain.
Ah the pain of youth and indecision. Or maybe that isn’t reserved for youth :-). Thanks for your thoughts!
Come on, man, don’t go to college! Grab some Plato, catch some rays, and teach yourself philosophy.
Seriously! Love it!
Sometimes a break is needed! There’s nothing wrong with taking a little time. Great writing.
Thanks! I agree. I could have used one in college. But alas, that was long ago! 🙂
long ago for me as well.
Go to college near the place you feel most complete. have the best of both worlds.
Ah to be young again and pondering college.